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1. '''Re the police responding to a 911 call about family violence''': | 1. '''Re the police responding to a 911 call about family violence''': | ||
The text suggested that the abuser would be taken into custody "in all likelihood" . . . | The text suggested that the abuser would be taken into custody "in all likelihood" . . . I changed the text to say police may arrest, may take into custody. See what you think. The same goes for describing what happens to the accused. | ||
2. '''Re groups like Battered Women's Support Services''' - these days the go-to is VictimLink - I added a paragraph about that - standard VictimLink language. | 2. '''Re groups like Battered Women's Support Services''' - these days the go-to is VictimLink - I added a paragraph about that - standard VictimLink language. | ||
3. '''In terms of a "safe house'''" I have | 3. '''In terms of a "safe house'''" I have referred to developing a safety plan as well as to the possibility of leaving the home and going to a safe place. (A safety plan acknowledges that many women don't leave the first, second or third time . . .) | ||
4. '''In terms of resources''', I took out the Dial-a-Law Dating Violence script (this section isn't about dating) and added the LSS family law website stuff on child protection (I think you get a much bigger bang for your buck having this resource in there). But the text does not seem to be fitting inside the text box - you can see the problem in View. (Hunted about to try to solve this but could not.) | 4. '''In terms of resources''', I took out the Dial-a-Law Dating Violence script (this section isn't about dating) and added the LSS family law website stuff on child protection (I think you get a much bigger bang for your buck having this resource in there). But the text does not seem to be fitting inside the text box - you can see the problem in View. (Hunted about to try to solve this but could not.) | ||
5. This is quite outside the realm of copy editing, but I found it odd that a chapter on Family Violence would start off with a discussion of tort law. . . If I was doing a substantive edit, I would move up the call the police, call VictimLink to be the lead items, and move on from there. | 5. This is quite outside the realm of copy editing, but I found it a bit odd that a chapter on Family Violence would start off with a discussion of tort law. . . If I was doing a substantive edit, I would move up the call the police, call VictimLink to be the lead items, and move on from there. |
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