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| Hi JP and Nate
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| I have made several substantive changes here that you will need to check, JP.
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| Point 6 is about a technical problem, for Nate.
| | I have added some resources - I am afraid that the generic lists of resources at the bottom of this section may not get readers to core publications. . . and that would be a shame. |
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| JP, you will see I have added some resources - I am afraid that the generic lists of resources at the bottom of this section may not get readers to core publications. . . and that would be a shame.
| | 1. Re calling police if you have suffered abuse, I added a reference to two LSS resources. |
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| 1. Re calling police if you have suffered abuse, I have taken the liberty of including reference to two LSS resources here. See what you think.
| | 2. Re contacting groups like Battered Women's Support Services - these days the go-to is VictimLink. I added a paragraph about that - it's standard VictimLink language. |
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| 2. '''Re groups like Battered Women's Support Services''' - these days the go-to is VictimLink - I added a paragraph about that - standard VictimLink language.
| | 3. At the end of the part on protection orders, I included a reference to the booklet, For Your Protection. (main ministry/lss book on the topic) |
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| 3. '''In terms of a "safe house'''" I have referred to developing a safety plan as well as to the possibility of leaving the home and going to a safe place. (Safety plans are big these days.)
| | 4. At the end of child protection (end of copy) I made reference to an LSS publication, Parents' Rights, Kids' Rights. |
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| 4. At the end of the part on protection orders, I included a reference to the booklet For Your Protection. (main ministry book on the topic)
| | 6. In terms of ''Resources and links'', I took out the Dial-a-Law Dating Violence script (not relevant) and added the LSS family law website stuff on child protection. But the text does not seem to be fitting inside the text box - you can see the problem in View. (I hunted about to try to solve this but could not.) |
| | [[User:Gayla Reid|Gayla Reid]] ([[User talk:Gayla Reid|talk]]) 17:04, 30 April 2013 (PDT) |
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| 5. At the end of child protection (end of copy) I again took the liberty of including reference to an LSS publication, Parents' Rights, Kids' Rights.
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| 6. '''In terms of Resources and links''', I took out the Dial-a-Law Dating Violence script and added the LSS family law website stuff on child protection (bigger bang for your buck; this section is not about dating). But the text does not seem to be fitting inside the text box - you can see the problem in View. (I hunted about to try to solve this but could not.)
| | This is outside the realm of copy editing, but I found it strange that a chapter on Family Violence would start off with a discussion of tort law. . . If I was doing a substantive edit, I would move up the call the police, call VictimLink to be the lead items, and go on from there. |
| | | [[User:Gayla Reid|Gayla Reid]] ([[User talk:Gayla Reid|talk]]) 17:04, 30 April 2013 (PDT) |
| 7. This is quite outside the realm of copy editing, but I found it a bit odd that a chapter on Family Violence would start off with a discussion of tort law. . . If I was doing a substantive edit, I would move up the call the police, call VictimLink to be the lead items, and move on from there.
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